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The maps below show how the town of Harborne changed from 1936 to 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show how the town of Harborne changed from 1936 to 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates the development of Harborne
town
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 over the period of time from 1936 to 2007. In 1936, the
town
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 was primarily a residential area with few commercial shops, containing more open space filled with trees. By 2007, the
town
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 transformed significantly, with the establishment of urbanization. The infrastructure is notable, with new roads which
facilitates
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the
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apply
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connectivity with the surroundings.
This
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 is
in contrast
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 with the poor road network in 1936. The major change can be seen with greenery and parks, which
has
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have
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 decreased over the years leading more towards
urbanizations
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urbanization
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,
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 and focusing towards housing and commercial properties. The introduction of
builldings
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buildings
 like, shopping centres,
museum
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museums
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 and apartments by 2007 highlights the need
of
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growing
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a growing
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 population.
This
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 change has
brought
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caused
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 Harborne to grow from
developing
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a developing
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town
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 to a developed suburban area. To summarize, to satisfy the needs of
growing
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a growing
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 society with housing and entertainment,
the
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apply
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Harborne
town
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 has lost its rural charm with
less
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fewer
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 green spaces and
garden
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gardens
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure
  • connectivity
  • residential area
  • open spaces
  • agricultural land
  • commercial establishments
  • population density
  • amenities
  • sustainable development
  • green spaces
  • suburban area
  • transformation
  • development
  • evolution
  • comparative analysis
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