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The map shows the plan for a new factory complex and housing area for employees. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map shows the plan for a new factory complex and housing area for employees. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Two diagrams compare the layout of the industrial areas as it was the present with the new designer in the future.
Firstly
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, a number of significant changes have taken place
such
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 as
,
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the
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all factories in
industrial
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the industrial
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 area now have demolished to make
a
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 away the new housings.
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, the playground will
appeared
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 in the east of
area
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.
Finally
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, the road will
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crossed
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 from south to north,
however
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the medical
center
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and the shops will
appeared
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the
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 near circle. In conclusion, It is
clearly
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 the main change of the future involves the addition
a
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of
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 new
housings
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housing
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 and a number of services.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • factory complex
  • housing area
  • infrastructure
  • transportation links
  • amenities
  • environmental sustainability
  • residential buildings
  • communal facilities
  • work-life balance
  • industrial development
  • urban planning
  • green spaces
  • employee accommodation
  • accessibility
  • layout
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