In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driveless. The only people traveling inside these vehicles will be passengares. Do you think the advantages of driveless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is predicted that all cars, buses, and trucks will be fully operated by
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in the future. These
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vehicles
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will only contain passengers. In
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essay, I will argue how the advantages
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vehicles
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can provide outweigh the disadvantages. One of the downsides of having fully automated
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is the level of
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safety
it can provide compared to the standard
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that
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by
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. Machines, which
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on the accuracy of electric sensors, can not react to
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sudden movements, unlike
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who can
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to unexpected situations.
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, it was reported that Tesla, one of the
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in
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cars, had an accident involving pedestrians
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they suddenly crossed the street
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the car was going fast. The car did not catch the situation through its sensors and ended up hitting several pedestrians.
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, these capabilities can be
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improved, so
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vehicles
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can be better
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reading sudden situations and avoiding traffic accidents.
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,
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vehicles
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may be able to reduce the
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of transportation.
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is because the remuneration of the drivers, which
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to more than 30% of the total transportation
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, can be eliminated since the drivers
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longer required to operate the
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.
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, more people can be accommodated
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a trip since there will be no dedicated space for the driver.
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, the operating
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to run a bus from Jakarta to Bandung was $100, divided into $30 for fuel, $40 for operational, and $30 for
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driver compensation. If the
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bus is utilized in the future, not only the operating
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will be lowered to only $70,
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total
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capacity can
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be increased. In conclusion, the development of fully automated
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offers advantages and drawbacks.
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vehicles
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may
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us with the risks of traffic incidents,
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still benefit us by reducing
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transportation costs.

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Utilize more cohesive devices to ensure smooth transitions between ideas.
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The essay effectively presents a clear argument about the advantages of driverless vehicles.
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The structure of the essay is logically organized into an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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