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The graph below shows the sales of children's books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 60 50 40 30 20 10 0 Children's books Adult fiction Educational books The sales of three different kinds of books between 2002 and 2006 2002 2003 2004 2005 2006 Million dollars

The graph below shows the sales of children's books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. 60 50 40 30 20 10 0 Children's books Adult fiction Educational books The sales of three different kinds of books between 2002 and 2006 2002 2003 2004 2005 2006 Million dollars
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The line graph illustrates how many
children
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's
books
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, adult fiction and educational
books
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 were bought in a single country, from the year 2002 until 2006. Unite is measured by
Dollar
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the chart that the
sales
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 of
children
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's
books
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 and educational
books
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 underwent an upward trend,
while
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 adult fiction witnessed a gradual decrease.
Children
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's
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books
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book
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sales
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 started in 2002 at nearly 33
million
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 dollars and saw a huge jump to about 50
millions
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million dollars
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dollar
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 in 2005.
Additionally
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, from 2005 to 2006 there was another dramatic growth in
sales
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 of
children
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's
books
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to hit
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 approximately 55
million
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 dollars
and
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apply
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representing its peak.
Moreover
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, educational
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books
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book
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sales
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' began
with
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at
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 nearly 25
million
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dollar
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dollars
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 and in spite of some
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 they reached their peaks twice in 2003 and 2006 with more than 30
million
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dollarsdollar
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dollars dollar
.
In contrast
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, Adult fiction was the only figure that experienced a downward trend, it
strarted
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started
 with the highest figure of over 40
million
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dollar
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dollars
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, and saw a modest fall to reach less than 40
million
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 in 2003.
Although
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 there was a slight rise in its
sales
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, it went down again to reach its trough at exactly 30
million
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dollarsdollar
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dollars dollar
 by the end of the period.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, books, dollar, sales, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sales
  • children's books
  • adult fiction
  • educational books
  • million dollars
  • fluctuated
  • steady increase
  • peak
  • popularity
  • upward trend
  • interest
  • genre
  • recovery
  • comparative analysis
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