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The line graph shows i8nformation about the percentage of th epopulation of four Asian countries living in cities and from 1970 to 2020, and with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarize key features and make compariopsns where relavnmet.

The line graph shows i8nformation about the percentage of th epopulation of four Asian countries living in cities and from 1970 to 2020, and with prediction for 2030 and 2040. Summarize key features and make compariopsns where relavnmet.
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The line chart illustrates data about the percentage of
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population
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the population
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 in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia residing in
cities
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.
Overall
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, it is noticeable from the line graph that the
population
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 who lived in
cities
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 of all four countries experienced an increase from 1970 to 2020 and
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also
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 expected to increase from 2030 to 2040. In
Malayasia
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Malaysia
, in 1970, around 30% of the
population
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 lived in
cities
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. In 1980, approximately 40% of the
population
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 lived in
cities
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.
This
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figure
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 gradually rose over the period, and in 2020, about 79% of
people
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 in Malaysia lived in
cities
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.
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, in 2030, above 80% of
people
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 will live in
cities
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 and in 2030, around 85% of
people
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 in
Malayasia
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Malaysia
 will live in
cities
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. Equally, in Indonesia, in 1970, around 13%
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people
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of people
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 lived in
cities
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 and the
figure
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 rose and in 2020, approximately 50% of the
population
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 lived in
cities
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. In 2030 and 2040, the
population
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 of Indonesia living in
cities
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 is expected to rise and by 2040 about 60% of the
population
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 will live in
cities
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. In
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, in 1970, around 30% of the
population
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 lived in
cities
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, and in 1990, it reached around 50% and
then
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, slightly declined to around 40% in 2010. The
figure
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 will reach approximately 50% in 2040. In Thailand, below 20% of
people
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 lived in
cities
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 in 1970 and the
figure
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 is predicted to reach around 60% in 2040.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, cities, figure, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 7 times.
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