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The chart show information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize key feature snd make comparisons where relavant.

The chart show information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarize key feature snd make comparisons where relavant.
The horizontal bar chart illustrates information about how
families
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 spent their weekly
income
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 in one nation in 1968 and in 2018.
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, it is noticeable from the bar chart that in 1968,
families
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 spent the major proportion of their weekly
income
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 on food,
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 in 2018,
families
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 invested the majority of their weekly
income
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 in leisure. In both 1968 and 2018,
families
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 invested the same percentage of their
income
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 in household goods. In 1968,
families
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 spent around 35% of their weekly
income
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 on food, which was the highest spending
of
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 their weekly
income
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.
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, in 2018,
families
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 spent above 20% of their weekly
income
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in
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 leisure, which was their highest expense. In 1968, the second-largest spending of
families
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 was housing and approximately 18% of their weekly
income
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 was spent on housing.
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,
in
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 1968 and 2018,
families
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 spent about 7% of
the
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their
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 weekly
income
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 on household goods. For transport,
families
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 spent below 10% of their weekly
income
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 in 1968, and in 2018,
families
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 spent below 15% of their weekly
income
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 on transport.
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,
families
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 spent the lowest amount of their weekly
income
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 on fuel and power in 1968 and 2018, and
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 above 5% and below 5% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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