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The chart shows information about the government spending on road and transport in 1990 and 2005. Summarize key information and make comparison where relavent.

The chart shows information about the government spending on road and transport in 1990 and 2005. Summarize key information and make comparison where relavent.
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The bar chart illustrates information about the proportion of the spending of the
government
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 on
road
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 and
transport
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 in
Italia
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, Portugal, the UK and the USA in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005.
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, the
government
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 of Portugal spent the
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most
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 on
road
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 and
transport
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 in 1990 among the four countries;
however
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, in the next three years, the expense declined.
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,
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Italia
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Italy
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 spent the second largest percentage of money among the four countries, and the UK and the USA spent significantly lower than
Italia
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 and Portugal. In 1990,
Portugal
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the Portugal
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government
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 spent around 26% on developing
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road
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roads
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 and
transport
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 and the figure gradually decreased. In 1995, approximately 23% of the expenditure of the
government
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 went for
road
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 and
transport
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 in Portugal. In 2000, it dropped to about 21%, and in 2000, it reached around 20%.
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, in
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Italy
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Italia
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, in 1990, the state spent above 20% on
road
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 and
transport
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.
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Italia
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Italy
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 spent the highest proportion of money on
road
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 and
transport
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 in 2000, and that was approximately 23%. In 2005,
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Italia
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Italy
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 spent below 20% on
road
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 and
transport
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. The
Uk
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UK
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 spent below 10% on
road
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 and
transport
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 in 1990, 1995 and 2005.
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, in 2000, above 10% was spent on
road
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 and
transport
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.
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, the USA spent below 15% on
road
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 and
transport
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 in all four years.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, moreover".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words government, road, transport, italia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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