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Band 4.5

The world of work is changing rapidly and people cannot depend on the same job or the same conditions of work for life. Discuss the possible causes for these changes and give your suggestions on how people should prepare for work

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It has been universally accepted that
changing
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 of
work
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 is escalating at an alarming rate and
people
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 should not
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depend
 on
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apply
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similar
job
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jobs
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 and
situation
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situations
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 of
work
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 for life.
This
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 change is bringing a state of depression among the masses and in
economy
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the economy
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 too. There
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plethora
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 of
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reasons
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 of the same and its possible solutions can be suggested too which are discussed as follows. In
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regards
regard
 to the problem, the major reason which can be started is Artifical-Intelligence technology has been invented which is replacing humans and
people
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 are getting
job
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a job
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 less. Another problematic cause is heavy
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work load
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workload
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 and not getting sufficient income as
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 to their designation in
company
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the company
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.
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, many IT
companys
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companies
company
 in India
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have
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 implemented
chat-gpt
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chat-GPT
 and new software which consume less time and
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 times faster
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then
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 humans. To vindicate, many
solution
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 can be
helpfull
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helpful
 to curb
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 menace. One of the
solution
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solutions
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 is
people
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 should learn
different
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they
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apply
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of
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cours
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courses
 related to their stream so that they can
excal
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excel
 in their skills to make money.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, individuals should do part-time
work
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 so that they have multiple
source
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sources
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 of income. Which can help them to manage expenses and wipe
of
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 their burdens.
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, a recent survey shows that many folks are doing trading and
invensting
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investing
 in
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the stock
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 market to
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 a side source of income.
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, solving a global issue is not
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easy
 but with the joint effort of the
people
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,
a
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control can be taken over the problem with the aforementioned suggested measures. I believe that everyone should come forward to mitigate
this
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 problem.

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grammar
Focus on improving your grammatical accuracy, especially with subject-verb agreement and spelling (e.g., 'dependent' instead of 'depent'). This will enhance the clarity of your writing.
clarity
Always define your terms in your introduction. Instead of stating 'changing of work is escalating at an alarming rate', elaborate on what specific changes you are referring to, such as technological advancements or economic shifts.
vocabulary
Vary your vocabulary and sentence structures to improve the overall sophistication of your essay. For instance, instead of repeating 'people should,' consider synonyms or different constructions to keep the reader engaged.
exemplification
Provide more detailed examples to substantiate your claims. For example, when discussing AI in the workplace, include specific jobs or sectors most affected to strengthen your argument.
argumentation
Your essay presents some relevant points regarding the changes in the job market and why individuals should prepare for these changes.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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