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The bar chart illustrates the wages in the U.K. for five different working sectors when they start their career and after three years of experience, while the table compares the average weekly hours for each profession. Salaries are measured with pounds.

The bar chart illustrates the wages in the U.K. for five different working sectors when they start their career and after three years of experience, while the table compares the average weekly hours for each profession. Salaries are measured with pounds.
The bar chart compares the
salary
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salaries
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 of five
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professions
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professionals
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 in the UK at the beginning of their
careers
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 and after
three
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years
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 of
experiece
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experience
. The table illustrates
avarage
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average
 working
hours
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 per week
of
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for
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 these
professions
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.
Overall
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,
firefighters
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 and underground drivers earn significantly
higher
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more
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 than police and
nurse
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nurses
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.
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, teachers and nurses have the highest average working
hours
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 compared to other
professions
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, and underground drivers have the lowest average working
hours
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. Underground drivers earn around 50,000
pounds
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 at the
starting
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start
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 of their
careers
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, and after
three
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years
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, the figure
reach
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reaches
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 above 50,000
pounds
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.
Moreover
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,
firefighters
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 earn around 40,000
pounds
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 when they start their
careers
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, and their salaries
increased
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increase
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 to approximately 43,000
pounds
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 after
three
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years
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. Meanwhile, police
earns
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earn
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 above 20,000
pounds
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 at the
starting
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start
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 of their
careers
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 and after
three
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years
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. Nurses have the lowest salaries among the five occupations, and they earn below 20,000
pounds
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 at the beginning of their
careers
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 and after
three
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years
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 of their
careers
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. Both teachers and
firefighters
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 have the highest working
hours
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 per week and
that is
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 55.
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, nurses work 38
hours
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 per week. Underground
firefighters
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 have the lowest working
hours
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 among the
professions
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 and weekly they work 38
hours
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words professions, careers, three, years, hours, firefighters, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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