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The Problem with Disposable Cups and How to Solve It

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In
America
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America,
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 millions of people rely on disposable
cups
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 for their daily hot drinks at schools and workplaces yet
this
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 convenience
makes
Verb problem
causes
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 severe environmental harm. In
America
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America,
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 approximately 50 billion hot drink
cups
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 are discarded annually, with fewer than 1% recycled. The core issue is in their materials many
cups
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 are lined with plastic or materials cannot be recyclable. Even recyclable options often end up in landfills
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 public confusion over disposal or a lack of proper recycling bins worsening pollution and resource waste and some people don’t have
potential
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the potential
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 to put it in recycling bins. To fix
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 a dual approach is essential. People can buy reusable
cups
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 is a simple switch. Some café s use
system
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a system
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 that a discount for bringing
your
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apply
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reusable
cups
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. At
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point
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point,
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 businesses and governments must improve policy and education. Clear
labeling
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labelling
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 and accessible recycling bins for
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the
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street and more like next to cafe shops. Government need to establish standards and use standardized
eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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 materials for cup production. And some companies can use
a compostable alternatives
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a compostable alternative
compostable alternatives
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. Ultimately reducing cup waste is almost impossible but by using reusables
and
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apply
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enhancing recycling systems and enforcing sustainable practices, society can significantly
make
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reduce
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this
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 environmental burden. Small daily changes paired with Systemic reforms play a key role in creating a greener future.

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coherence and cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas more clearly. For instance, separate your points about the problem and the solutions into distinct paragraphs to enhance clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that every sentence supports this idea. This will help make your argument stronger.
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Provide specific examples to support your points. While you mention reusable cups and compostable alternatives, giving more real-life examples would strengthen your argument.
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Clarify the main points in your introduction. For example, explicitly state the main issue and what you will discuss in terms of solutions.
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You have identified a significant environmental issue and provided a thoughtful solution, showing engagement with the topic.
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Your effort to suggest both individual and systemic solutions demonstrates good critical thinking.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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