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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Some students choose to work or travel after leaving school and before going to university. Many people, however, say that working experience is more useful in adult life than travel.Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In
this
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 period of modernity and globalization, many pupil wants to travel
instead
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 of doing work after
completed
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school
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 and before going to university because every
students
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student
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need
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 a break after
giving
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taking
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thier
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their
 board exams
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 horrifiying
strees
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stress
streets
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. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with
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 notion and my opinion will be discussed in
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further
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pharagraphs
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paragraph
 with a suitable conclusion. Supporting my disagreement
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 the given statement. I firmly believe that
by
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exploring new places and
environment
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environments
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 can be beneficial for
thier
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their
life
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. They can learn new skills and spend their time with
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friend
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,
create
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creating
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life time
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lifetime
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 memory with them. For
intance
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instance
, a recent survey displayed that 80
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 of students travel after leaving
school
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 so they get clear
what
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on what
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 they have to do or work
in
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on in
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 future.
Explaning
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Explaining
 some of the
another
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other
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 supporting
point
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in
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against the statement, they can prepare themselves for their
further
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 studies.
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, they are
entring
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entering
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in
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the
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a
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 new phase of their
life
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 and new
challanges
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challenges
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be
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come up. After traveling they will feel more pumped up.
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, they will
take
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make
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 good
discions
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decisions
discussions
 in their
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.
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, in
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India
 many schools take their students on a trip after completing 12th class. In conclusion,
pupil
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a pupil
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 wants to travel
instead
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 of doing work after
completed
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completing
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school
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 and before going to university . I believe that
aforementioned
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the aforementioned
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 points are strongly supporting my
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viewpoint
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view point
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viewpoint
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language
Make sure to check the spelling and grammar in your essay. For example, 'pupil' should be 'pupils', 'thier' should be 'their', and 'horrifiying' should be 'horrifying'.
structure
Ensure your introduction clearly outlines your main points and provides a strong thesis statement. Instead of saying 'my opinion will be discussed in this further paragraphs', specify what your main arguments are.
support
When providing examples, make sure they are relevant and detailed. The survey example could include more context to strengthen your argument.
argumentation
You have a clear opinion throughout the essay and consistently express your disagreement with the statement.
content
The essay attempts to address the importance of travel and its benefits, which is a relevant point in your argument.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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