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The charts below show information about the average temperatures of three different bodies of water in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Average water temperature in three bodies of water, 2012

The charts below show information about the average temperatures of three different bodies of water in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Average water temperature in three bodies of water, 2012
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The charts below illustrate the average
temperature
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 of the Mediterranean Sea (
ms
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), Coral Sea (cs), and Gulf of Mexico (
gom
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). It can be seen that in summer, it has the highest water temperatures in all three bodies, with
Gom
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 and CS having similar temperatures of 31
degrees
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Celsius
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 and 29
degrees
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Celsius
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, respectively, and
ms
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 having a
temperature
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 of 23
degrees
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Celsius
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. Spring and Autumn are slightly different in the Coral Sea -27 and 26-. In
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ms
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MS
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, spring is colder than autumn, and in
Gom
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, autumn was 27
while
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 spring was 24. Winter was the coolest in the year 2012.
In contrast
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, cs had a smooth drop from 26 to 24. The largest drop in
temperature
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 was in the Gulf of Mexico where it dropped to 17
degrees
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Celsius
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,
lastly
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,
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ms
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MS
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 had the lowest
temperature
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 in winter as expected.
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 to summer, it had the warmest
temperature
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 of the three bodies with
gom
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 having the maximum value In summary, all three bodies change their average
temperature
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 in the four seasons differently.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, ms, gom, degrees, celsius with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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