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Schools are important part of life which teach students.

Some individuals consider that school is a necessary part of life which
teach
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 us vital skills.
However
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, another group of people claims that
self studying
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 is the key to
efficient
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an efficient
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 education process because it gives an opportunity to spend
time
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the most
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 interesting and sufficient sides. In
this
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essay
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 I’m going to review both sides and find their pros and cons. On the one hand,
school
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schools
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don’t give us to do nothing
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don’t give us to do anything
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 and teach
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not only subjects but
also
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 discipline. Certain
curriculum
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 which repeat every week
allow to
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don’t
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students
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students'
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mind
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minds
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 with plan writing and focusing on
educational
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the educational
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 process. In fact,
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only
students
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mandatory is
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absorbing
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 information
which
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apply
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given by professors.
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, in alma
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 all information is already prepared and well structured so
students
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don’t
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 compulsory to spend
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on
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researching. Schools or
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 programs
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 on
most
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the most
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 efficient remembering of material and deep understanding of the topics because
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 written for along by
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a group
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 of professional
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pedagogues
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.
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, studying from
house
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a house
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 can
have
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 more sense in cases of strong
self discipline
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self-discipline
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fully
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 understanding of own future profession.
Students
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 who learn by themself usually
don’t
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 spend
time
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 on
useless
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the useless
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 topic because they
firmly
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are firmly
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 sure about their personal direction of development and understand
importance
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the importance
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 of
time
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 management.
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,
according to
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 the research, most
of
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students
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 who truly love to study usually do extra tasks at home or
don’t
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 visit any institutions at all. In fact,
instead
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 of accepting already written rule and schedule
self studying
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self-studying
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students
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 learn with discipline by themself which could give them an advantage in adult life
due to
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 already mastered skill to adapt.
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 all
above
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the above
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, there is no obvious answer
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to
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controversial
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the controversial
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topic
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topics
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about
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for and against because of
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the comprehensive
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of
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issue. Some types of study,
such
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 as
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studying
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 from home,
more
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are more
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 suitable for people who can pull themself together and really motivate
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themselves in
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in becoming
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to become
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 professional.
Whereas
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, general
students
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 will be more prefer to
educate
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be educated
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 in schools or
university
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universities
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 like everyone because it is
easiest
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the easiest
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 way.

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language
Make sure to proofread for grammatical errors and sentence structures. For example, 'school don’t give us to do nothing' could be rephrased for clarity.
structure
Consider improving the introduction to better indicate the specific arguments you will discuss.
development
Use more specific examples to illustrate your points, both in favor of school and self-study.
content
The essay presents both sides of the argument, showing an understanding of different perspectives.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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