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mrs barret, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her home for a few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to mrs bareett. in your letter suggest how you could help her in her home say why you would like to do this work explain when you will and will not be available

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Dear Mrs Barrett, I am writing in connection with the advertisement which was asked about someone in order to assist you for a few hours on a daily basis between 21 June and 28 June. I am a pharmacy student at White College and I wish a part-time job that suits my personality.
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, I can help you in different matters including tenting to plants, looking after pets and paying for different factors. To explain more, I am an introverted person and treating pets and plants
are
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 soothing for me.
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, they can add more joy and zest to my life.
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,
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 of increasing the dormitory fees, I find it difficult to pay my tuition
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 semester.
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, I would like to help you in your home.
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, my university classes may lead to not being available all the time. Should you need to be on the phone. I am reached on 0912 on Sundays and Tuesdays. I am looking forward to receiving your response. Yours sincerely, Mah Ka

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task achievement
Clarify your availability by mentioning any specific hours you can work within those dates. This will provide Mrs. Barrett with a clearer idea of when you are available.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by organizing your thoughts into more distinct paragraphs. For instance, create separate paragraphs for your introduction, how you can help, why you want the job, and your availability.
coherence cohesion
The letter opens and closes with appropriate greetings and sign-offs, making it polite and formal.
task achievement
You've clearly suggested ways you can help Mrs. Barrett and explained why you would like to do the job, which is key to fulfilling the task.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household chores
  • errands
  • meal preparation
  • companionship
  • availability
  • flexible schedule
  • duties
  • responsibilities
  • commitment
  • summer job
  • helping hand
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