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The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006.

The table below shows the number of temporary migrant worker in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1,000 people in these countries in 2006.
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The chart shows the
number
Use synonyms
 of temporary migrant
worker
Fix the agreement mistake
workers
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among
Change preposition
in
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 four nations
in
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on
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 different dates,
along with
Linking Words
 the
number
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 of
some
Correct quantifier usage
apply
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workers
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 per 1000 population in these countries in 2006.
Overall
Linking Words
,
United
Correct article usage
the United
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states
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States
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have
Wrong verb form
had
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 the greatest
people
Correct quantifier usage
number of people
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 in 2006,
while
Linking Words
, New Zealand
have
Wrong verb form
had
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 the lowest
number
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 of temporary
workers
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. As we can see there is highly variable in each country and dates. USA, the populations
had
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has
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 risen
about
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by about
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olny
Correct your spelling
only
 one hundred in 3 years, as same as New Zealand displays
slight
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a slight
the slight
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 increase in working hands which is nearly 20000. in Australia, there is
significant
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a significant
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fluctuate
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fluctuation
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 in
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number
Change the article
a number
the number
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 of
workers
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betweed
Correct your spelling
between
 only three years.
United
Correct article usage
The United
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 Kingdom which is one out of four nations
have
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has
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 the greater rise in
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number
Change the article
a number
the number
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 of
workers
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,
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 can hit 100
thousands
Change to singular
thousand
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 change.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, workers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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