Many people believe that TV news and media in general have a detrimental effect on our life. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your own opinion, including relevant examples.

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Inspit
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In spite
of media and
telivision
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television
news
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channels
are
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proving their significant value for the betterment of
the
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society, a portion of people conceive a notion that there have been
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detrimental outcomes in our life. Personally, I disagree
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belief, and truly admire their
importnace
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importance
for ourselves.
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following paragraphs will justify my disagreement.
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has
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been several incidents
,
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when our community have gone through hard times,
the
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reports from
media
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the media
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came as
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for us.
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, during the time of
Covid-19
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outbreak, reporters were constantly reporting significant
news
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worldwide.
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, they were providing important details to fight back
the
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disease. Local press agencies
also
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broadcast substantial incidents around the city. I have always been
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keen on regional reports, as
it
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keep me updated with various crimes around my area, and act as a
safegaurd
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safeguard
to
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me. In
addtion
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addition
, undoubtedly, I have always shown
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to watch daily weather
forscasts
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forecasts
, assisting me to plan my day with suitable clothing and outdoor activities.
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, It protects me by making me carry
unbrella
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umbrella
umbrellas
on rainy days
as well as
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making me wear extra clothing on the occasion of cold nights.
News
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service
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always have been a prime medium
of
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spreading
awarness
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awareness
around the globe. Wherever you are on the planet
earth
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, the press is there to provide you
necessary
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with necessary
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information around the globe.
Due to
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their huge network
systemes
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systems
, there is zero possibility
to get
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of getting
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anything
miss
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from other nations. Various
annoucements
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announcements
on the war of the
Ukrain
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Ukraine
and
rassia
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Russia
cassia
is
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illustarting
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illustrating
their role
for
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the community. In
conlusion
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conclusion
, it can be said that
news
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reports are
such
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a blessing for
a
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humankind. I
beileve
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believe
that they have
an
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ability to deliver information, leading to
continous
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continuous
progression for us.
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, it proves my disagreement, and
stregthen
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strengthens
my
view point
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viewpoint
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.

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language
Make sure to check your spelling and grammatical mistakes, as they can distract from your argument and clarity of your writing. For example, 'Inspite' should be 'In spite', and 'telivision' should be 'television'.
coherence
Ensure your ideas are logically sequenced so that each paragraph flows clearly to the next; adding linking phrases could significantly improve coherence.
task achievement
Expand your examples to provide more detailed context or explanation; while your examples are relevant, they could be enriched for better clarity and impact.
content
You provided relevant examples to support your arguments.
structure
Your introduction outlines your opinion clearly, which is great for understanding your perspective early on.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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