Some people think that developing countries need financial help from international organizations to continue their development. Some people argue that practical aid or advice is more useful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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and so are the
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are divided into groups and
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development
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the development
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of
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countries
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a topic of debate among
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comapre
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compare
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opinions
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favour of
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view will be discussed in a sensible conclusion. Initiating with the points supporting
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school of thought,
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, in case of emergency developing countries do not have enough funds available for innovation so
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they pitch to international
organization
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organizations
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for investment.
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, financial help can
also
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built
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the relationship between two nations and they can be beneficial in
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their
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future.
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Indian
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authority has
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USA
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the USA
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forigen
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investment for
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in financial
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suppot
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support
for technology.
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to
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good terms with
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the USA
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and many students from India are studying in
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the USA
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. On
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contrasing
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contrasting
contracting
side,
people
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who
held
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another
view point
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viewpoint
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say
pratical
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practical
aid or advice is more useful. They believe that, in their own country they have various practical
way
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ways
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to enhance development and they have
an successful
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successful business men
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business men
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businessmen
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, so that they can give them
a good advice
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good advice
a piece of good advice
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and
suggestion
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suggestions
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.
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this
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will
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aslo
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also
contribute
in
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theri
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their
the
economy and develop
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employment rates.
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, In India, there was
economist
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an economist
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name
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named
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Dr. Manmohan Singh
which
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help
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helped
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them by giving
advise
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advice
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on how to improve GDP. In
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, I would
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to say that, developing countries need financial help from international organizations to continue because it will help them to do work more
effectivily
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effectively
and efficiently.
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, it will
be depend
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upon the mindsets of the
people
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that
which
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apply
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view
they
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them
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in favour
of
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apply
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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and provide more specific examples to enhance your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid spelling errors and ensure the logical progression of ideas between paragraphs for better clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Use more varied vocabulary and sentence structures to improve the overall quality of writing.
task achievement
You have provided a balanced discussion of both views, which shows good understanding of the topic.
task achievement
You present relevant points regarding the benefits of financial aid versus practical advice.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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