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The chart below shows the percentage of people who used different modes of transportation in a city between 2010 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of people who used different modes of transportation in a city between 2010 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart provides key information about the
percentage
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 of people who use transportation,which includes cars, buses, bicycles,
as well as
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 trains. The units are measured in
percentage
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that there
had
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has
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 been an increase in the
percentage
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 of people who used
car
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cars
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 and
bicycle
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bicycles
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 over the decade.
In addition
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 , the largest increase
had been
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was
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 seen in car
usage
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while
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,
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apply
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 bicycle
usage
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was
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increased slightly.
According to
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 the data,
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usage
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the usage
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 rate of
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the car
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car
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cars
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 was 50% in 2010
then
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 after five years in 2015 and 2020 It increased by 5% respectively 55% in 2015. The
percentage
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 of people who used bicycles was 15% in 2010
then
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 it increased by 3% in
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last
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the last
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 5 years 2. Regarding buses, the
percentage
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 was 20% in 2010,
whereas
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 train
usage
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 was 15%. In 2015 and 2020 there was a slight decrease in train
usages
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usage
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 from 10% to 7%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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