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Band 5.5

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans provide details of a proposal for the one-year renovation of Southwest Airport.
Overall
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, the main new features will be increasing the number of gates
together with
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 the addition of a range of new facilities. Entrance to the departure and arrival sections will largely go unaltered,
although
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 additional doors will be installed in both. At present, departures
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 just a check-in desk and a café, but the proposal is to move the check-in from the left to the right to accommodate a bag drop area and relocate the café to the left of the main entrance. Arrivals will
also
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 see a café added
as well as
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 an ATM and a car hire business. To establish the car hire business, an extension will be built to provide adequate space. There will be no changes to airport security, passport control, and customs. Several shops,
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, will be opened in the departure zone, located on the left upon entering from security. By far the greatest proposed development involves building two corridors to the departure gates, which will be more than doubled from the current eight to eighteen and replacing the existing walkway with a sky train.

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Task Response
While your essay covers the main features of the redevelopment adequately, some areas could benefit from more detailed comparisons. Try to highlight not only what is added but also how it contrasts with the current features.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay is well-structured, and the ideas flow logically. However, linking phrases or transition words could further enhance the connection between sentences and paragraphs, improving overall coherence.
Task Achievement
The introduction effectively summarizes the overall transformation and key features of the airport redevelopment.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay presents a clear layout, making it easy for the reader to follow the changes proposed in different sections of the airport.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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