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Band 4.5

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The plan depicts several changes and developments of the site of a certain airport between now and redevelopment after 1 year.
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, it can be seen that one of the most considerable changes will be in the number of gates, which will be increased
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 the walkway will be knocked down and replaced with a sky train. Moving to a more detailed analysis, the number of
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doors in both departures and arrivals will be increased from 1 to 2. A new bag drop area will be added to the departures area, in which there is the
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 three different new facilities will be added to the arrivals area, including a café, an ATM, and car hire. With regard to the gates, there are currently 8 and it will be 18 after development, whereby the walkway will be demolished and the sky train way will be built.
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, new shops will be constructed in the west of security passport control in the next year.

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coherence and cohesion
Consider adding an overall summary statement in the conclusion that emphasizes the overall changes. This will enhance the clarity of your final thoughts.
coherence and cohesion
Try to include more comparison phrases, especially when discussing the improvements to the airport facilities. This will help in creating clearer contrasts between the two plans.
task achievement
Make sure to use a range of grammatical structures to vary your sentences. This will contribute to higher scores for language use.
task achievement
You clearly identified significant differences between the current and planned airport layout, particularly pertaining to the increase in gates and new facilities.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of your essay is logical, with a clear introduction and body paragraphs that cover the necessary points, which aids in overall understanding.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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