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Band 5

Your friend had made a plan for you to see a movie together but you cannot now not join him. You've found another friend who can go instead of you. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Explain why you cannot go anymore Say who can go instead of you Say why this person is a good person to go with

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Dear my friend, Sadly, I have to apologize to you that I
couldn’t
Wrong verb form
can’t
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 join your movie night anymore because of an urgent crucial meeting
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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coming on Monday. I need more time to finish it and rehearse over and over.
Anyways
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Anyway
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, I’m here to tell you
a
Correct article usage
the
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 good news is that I have a friend who has
passion
Correct article usage
a passion
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in
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for
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 movie
critic
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criticism
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. I think
this
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 guy could make your night more interesting. His name is Leo, he works in
movie
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the movie
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 industry as well.
Actually
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Actually,
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 I just met him one time at the club.
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Also
Add a comma
Also,
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 he is really friendly so no worries about any awkward
moment
Fix the agreement mistake
moments
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 from him.
Moreover
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, he can describe
you
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to you
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in
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apply
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some technical production.
The most
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Most
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 importantly, he is single and looking for a serious relationship!
However
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, if you don’t like him as
life
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a life
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 partner, you can just
being
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be
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 a good friend
with
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to
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 him I will send you his personal contact if you are down with it. Please let me know what you think. Always love, Monty

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to improve the clarity of your reasons for not attending by restructuring your sentences. Try to avoid phrases that are overly complex, such as 'an urgent crucial meeting is coming on Monday.' Instead, simplify to 'I have an urgent meeting on Monday.'
coherence and cohesion
Consider making your sentences more fluid and connected. You can use transitions to guide the reader through your reasons and the introduction of Leo as your replacement.
task achievement
Try to eliminate unnecessary phrases to make the writing more direct and concise. For example, rather than saying, 'I have to apologize to you that I couldn’t join your movie night anymore,' simply state 'I’m sorry, but I can’t join you for movie night.'
task achievement
Ensure a consistent tone throughout your letter. While it is friendly, some expressions could be more formal to match the context, particularly in conveying your regret.
task achievement
You provided a clear explanation of why you cannot attend, which addresses the main point of the task well.
task achievement
The introduction of the replacement friend and their qualities is engaging and adds interest to the letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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