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The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opened, kilometres or route and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Underground Railway Systems Date opened Kilometres of route London Paris Tokyo Washington DC Kyoto Los Angeles 1863 1900 1927 1976 1981 2001 394 199 155 126 11 28 Passengers per year (in millions) 775 1191 1928 144 45 50

The table shows data about underground railway systems in six major cities with date opened, kilometres or route and passenger numbers per year in millions. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Underground Railway Systems Date opened Kilometres of route London Paris Tokyo Washington DC Kyoto Los Angeles 1863 1900 1927 1976 1981 2001 394 199 155 126 11 28 Passengers per year (in millions) 775 1191 1928 144 45 50
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The table gives information about the opening date, the travelling distance in
kilometres
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, and the number of passengers per year in millions, of underground railway systems in six main cities.
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, it can be seen that the earliest railway was opened in
London
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, it
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 covers the longest
kilometres
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,
whereas
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 the train in Tokyo has the largest number of passengers yearly.
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, Looking at the opening date and the track length , the first railway was launched in 1863 in
London
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. The one in Paris started
at the end
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 of the 19th century,
while
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 others were during the 20th century, except in, Los Angeles which was opened in 2001.
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, the trainline in
London
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 can travel as far as 394
kilometres
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.
This
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 is the farthest, compared to others. The least is seen in Kyoto, it could reach only 11
kilometres
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, which is 17
kilometres
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 less than the one in Los Angeles.
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, considering the total of commuters in a year, the suburb in Tokyo has the largest figure, it carries 1928
million
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 people every year. Paris and
London
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,
also
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 have a significant number of travellers, around 1191
million
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 and 775
million
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 respectively.
Although
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 it made the fourth on
this
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 list, Washington DC recorded up to 144
million
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 passengers yearly.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kilometres, london, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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