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You work in an international company. You need to take some time off work. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter: explain why you need this time off give details of when you want this time off say who can do your work when you are away

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I need some time off from work. I will be visiting
to
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USA
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the USA
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 to attend my brother's marriage. He has planned a big wedding and all of my family and friends are gathering there to bless the couple. It's a big family
renunion
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reunion
 after a long time where I will be meeting my extended family and distant relatives.
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 will be a memorable event which I don't want to miss.d I
also
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 plan to visit famous tourist attractions in
USA
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the USA
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 after the marriage which will make my visit a little longer. In total, I will need
leaves
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leave
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 for 30 days from August 1st to August 30th
this
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 year. As you know, I have been working in my current role
of
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 Sales Leader for
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last
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the last
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 2 years and I have a strong team supporting me. John Daniel, the north region sales lead from my team has agreed to
takeup
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take up
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 my responsibilities during my absence. I have already started to keep him in
loop
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the loop
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 for all ongoing client discussions. I assure you that my unavailability will not impact any client
deliverable
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deliverables
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. I will be available on my phone in case of any emergency during
this
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 period. I am looking forward to
get
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 your approval for the time off.
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Yours
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Your
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Yours
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 faithfully, Sumit Dua

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coherence and cohesion
Consider separating your reasons for time off into clearer sentences. This can enhance clarity and flow.
task achievement
Ensure you double-check your grammar and spelling, such as 'renunion' and 'takeup' which should be 'reunion' and 'take up'.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains a polite and formal tone, which is suitable for a communication with your employer.
complete response
You provided specific details about the time off and who will cover your responsibilities, which fulfills the task requirements well.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • requesting time off
  • minimal disruption
  • capable colleague
  • cover responsibilities
  • workload management
  • urgent tasks
  • accessible
  • considering your request
  • contribute more effectively
  • appreciate
  • temporary absence
  • proactive planning
  • smooth transition
  • alternative arrangement
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