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You recently received an invitation to a dinner party at your friend's house. Write a letter to accept the invitation. In your letter: - explain why you are accepting the invitation - describe why you are looking forward to the dinner party - offer to bring a dish to share You do not need to write any addresses.

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Dearn
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Dear

The word Dearn doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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 Jenna, I hope you are doing well. I have not seen you in a
while
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. Probably it was
a
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last
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 month
,
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It appears that you have an unnecessary comma before the dependent clause marker when. Consider removing the comma.

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 when we went outside for
a
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lunch together. I got your invitation for a dinner party at your place. I was overjoyed
,
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It appears that you have an unnecessary comma before the dependent clause marker when. Consider removing the comma.

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 when I
recieved
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received

If you don’t want recieved to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

tour
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the tour

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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 invitation card.
Moreover
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, I am happily accepting
this
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 invitation. The prime
reseaon
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reason

If you don’t want reseaon to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

to be there is to spend time with you. I have missed you every single day. Most importantly, I am looking forward to
see
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seeing

The verb see is usually in the gerund form when following the word looking forward to. Consider replacing it with the -ing form.

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 your parents. They have been always so nice to me, and I
want
Add the particle
want to

It appears that the verb eat should be in the to-infinitive form. Consider adding the word to.

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 eat
a food
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food
a portion of food

The indefinite article, a, may be redundant when used with the uncountable noun food in your sentence. Consider removing it.

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, which is made by your mother. Undoubtedly, she is a great chef.
However
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, I am excited to see our childhood friends, as they are invited, too. But, I have one request for you. Recently, I have started taking baking classes, and I have learned to make delicious chees cakes.
Therefore
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, I am planning to bring Blueberry flavoured chees-cake on that day. So please inform your mother not to cook anything for
a desserts
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desserts
a dessert

The indefinite article a may not be required with the plural noun desserts in this sentence. Consider removing the article, or changing the noun to singular.

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, as I will bring it. Can't wait for our reunion. See you next week! Lots of love, Mihir.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas more clearly. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea to improve readability.
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Check for minor spelling errors and punctuation, for example, 'Dearn' should be 'Dear' and 'recieved' should be 'received'.
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In your letter, you could elaborate a little more on why you enjoy your friend's parents' cooking to add depth to your response.
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Your enthusiasm for the dinner party and the warm tone creates a positive atmosphere in the letter.
coherence and cohesion
Your offer to bring a dish and the mention of your baking classes adds a personal touch to the invitation.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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