The diagram below give information on transport and car use in edmonton.

The diagram below give information on transport and car use in edmonton.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below give information on transport and car use in edmonton.
The graph provides the
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of books,which were borrowed in
four
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different months in 2014 from
four
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village
libraries
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,with the diagram illustrating the percentage of types of books that
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borrowed. As can be seen from the graph, differences in
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four
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libraries
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various
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considerably, except for Church Mount and West Eaton, which were almost
equally
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.
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, from June to July,Sutton Wood experienced a slight increase, from 250 to 275 respectively.
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, it faced
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dramatic decreases almost
in
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three times,after that it increased
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to 300 in September,which was the peak among
four
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libraries
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.
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, the Ryeslip line steadily declined through
four
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months,which was 300 to nearly 150 respectively.
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, lines on the West Eaton and Church Mount were virtually identical,
libraries
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experienced different
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of steadily rising, but both started from 50 and ended up at 150 books from June to September,which was the lowest number. It is clear from the diagram that the most borrowed type was
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Fiction with 43%.
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, almost one in five. Science and History had the same quantity, 14 per cent. The minority was Self-help with a mere 10 per cent

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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Replace the words four, libraries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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