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The pie charts show the revenue sources and expenditures of a children’s charity in the USA in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts show the revenue sources and expenditures of a children’s charity in the USA in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given pie charts illustrate the six sources of
the
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revenue
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 that a children's
charity
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recieved
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received
money
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 from and the three main types of
expenditures
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 that they spent in the USA during a single year. Generally speaking, for
revenue
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 sources, donated food was the primary
souce
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source
 of
money
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 that a
charity
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 acquired, but for
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expenditures
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 program services proved to be the main type of
expenditures
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 that they spent
money
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 on. Donated food was the major source of
money
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 used to run a
charity
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, recording a share of 86.6%. Community contributions had enjoyed the second
most
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largest share in its source of
revenue
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, showing a total of 10.4%. Meanwhile, the remaining
souces
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sources
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 of
revevenue
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revenue
, which are investment income, government grants, and other income, recorded almost equally, ranging from 0.2%-0.4%.
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, program services were one of the three types of
expenditures
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 that a children's
charity
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 spent a significant amount of
money
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 on, accounting for 95.8%, which was the largest portion of
expenditures
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. Meanwhile, fundraising and management and general had an almost identical total, standing at 2.6% and 1.6%, respectively. Fortunately, the amount of
money
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 that a children's
charity
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 received from various sources of
revenue
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 was higher than the amount of
expenditures
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 that they spent
money
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 on
in
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each year by approximately 300,000 dollars.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words revenue, charity, money, expenditures with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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