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The chart below shows the percentage of total US population aged 65 and over between 1900 and 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of total US population aged 65 and over between 1900 and 2000. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of the total U.S. population aged 65 and over between 1900 and 2000, divided into three
age
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 groups: 65-74, 75-84, and 85+.
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, the proportion of elderly individuals in the U.S. increased steadily throughout the century. The 65-74
age
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 group consistently accounted for the largest share,
while
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 the 85+ category remained the smallest.
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, the most notable growth occurred in the older
age
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 brackets, particularly in the 85+ group. In 1900, only 4.1% of the population was aged 65 and over, with the majority (2.9%) belonging to the 65-74 category. Over the following decades,
this
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 percentage rose gradually, reaching 8.1% in 1950 and 12.4% by 2000. The proportion of people aged 75-84
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 showed a significant rise from 1.0% in 1900 to 4.4% in 2000. The most dramatic increase occurred in the 85+
age
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 group, which started at just 0.2% in 1900 but expanded to 1.5% by 2000.
This
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 indicates a growing trend in life expectancy and an
aging
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ageing
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 population. In summary,
while
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 all elderly
age
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 groups experienced growth, the older segments, especially those aged 85+, saw the most substantial increase over the century.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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