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Band 6.5

Write a letter to the local council about plans to close a children's playground in your area in your letter, you should: -say why children are not using the playground -Explain how important the playground is for the local community -Suggest how the playground could be improved

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my concern about the planned closure of Maplewood Children's Playground.
While
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 it sees low usage,
this
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 is mainly
due to
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 damaged equipment, poor lighting, and lack of maintenance, making it unsafe and uninviting for families. The playground is vital for the community, providing a safe space for children to play and socialize
while
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 encouraging outdoor activities. Without it, children may miss out on physical and social development, and parents will lose a valuable gathering spot.
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 of closing it, I urge the council to renovate the playground by installing modern equipment, improving lighting, and adding benches and shaded areas. Organizing community events could
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 increase engagement. I kindly request the council to reconsider its decision and invest in improvements to benefit local families. Thank you for your time. Best regards, Krushang Patel

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task achievement
Consider providing specific examples of how the playground has benefited children in the past to strengthen your argument about its importance to the community.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph maintains a clear focus by linking your ideas explicitly, perhaps with transition phrases.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is well-structured with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, making it easy to follow.
task achievement
The tone is appropriate and respectful, which is suitable for a letter to the local council.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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