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The table shows the percentage of government expenditure on health care in five countries in 2006 as well as the proportions of 24-30-year-olds working in medical services. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the percentage of government expenditure on health care in five countries in 2006 as well as the proportions of 24-30-year-olds working in medical services. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table presents the proportion of government spending and workforce distribution in
medical
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the medical
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 industry in five countries - Poland, Finland, Iceland, Spain and Italy - in 2006, respectively.
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Polish
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the Polish
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 government distributed the smallest budget on health care
while
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 having over
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half of its 24-
30-year-olds
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30-year-old
 citizens working in medical service, outpacing all its counterparts.
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, the investment in
health
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the health
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 care system in Italy accounted for the highest percentage among
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 countries. For health care expenditure, Italy demonstrated the largest share at 27%, with Spain and Iceland falling behind at 13% and 11%,
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.
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Findland
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Finland
 and Poland spent less
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then
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 one-ten of
its
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 government
expense
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 in
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 field, standing at 9% and 5%. As for the employees contributing
in
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 medical service, Polen represents its leading position at 54%, surpassing the second place, Italy, by 14%. The other three candidates - Spain, Iceland, and Finland - exhibited close figures at 34, 29, and 25 per cent.

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