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Do you agree or disagree with the argument of have got to believe in yourself, even when no one else does. ? Write a short and well-organized essay in about 200 to 250 words to express your own argument(s) supported with relevant examples

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I strongly believe that
people
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 who believe in themselves are more powerful than those who depend on others. Actually, Situations are the proof that reveals the true faces of
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friends or close ones when we are low in our life.
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, believing in yourself means relying on your talent. As far as I am concerned, believing in yourself gives you more success than depending on someone else's opinion.
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, some children secured good grades in their studies without legs. These kinds of
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 are called handicapped, but they
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 not stop studying when the world
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 them useless. They trusted their talent and moved forward
that
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which
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results
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 in
their
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sucess
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success
of
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in
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 their life.
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,
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people
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 who
are
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 with lot of difficulties
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their
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 young age are getting settled when they come to
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 age.
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, the public who stop trying to get well named in
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society listening to their friends and
collegues
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colleagues
 discouragements leads to
unsucessfull
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unsuccessful
 life.
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, Citizens who always depend on others' opinions and wait for various
people
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 to respond when they are low do not have
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 opinion every time. In my opinion,
people
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 have to believe in themselves all the time.
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 points, I want
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 that, No one will be there for
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 of the day. We are only responsible for ourselves.
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 is the reason
people
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 have to believe in themselves when no one is there for them .
This
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 is the situation that reveals how strong the
people
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 are in difficult situations.

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coherence and cohesion
Improve the clarity and presentation of your argument by ensuring each point is logically organized and flows seamlessly. Consider clearer transitions between ideas to enhance coherence.
task achievement
While examples enhance your argument, make sure they are fully relevant and clearly explained to strengthen your overall response. Linking them back to your main argument explicitly will help.
task achievement
You provide a strong personal viewpoint that emphasizes the importance of self-belief, with relevant examples from real-life situations.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay structure has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion, which helps in guiding the reader through your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-confidence
  • self-esteem
  • positive mindset
  • resilience
  • persistence
  • determination
  • overcome challenges
  • achieving goals
  • skepticism
  • doubt
  • success
  • personal growth
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