1.You are a parent and you need information about a school trip your child is going on. Write a letter to the class teacher. In your letter • introduce yourself • explain what information you are looking for • inform the teacher about any specific needs your child has

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Dear Mrs Ayat, I hope you are doing well.I
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concern
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from
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you for a short trip that
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for kids towards your school management.
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,I am telling you about
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a government teacher and
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9th,
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class
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.I have
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duty
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with 3 kids during my job I have to concentrate
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kids
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activities.Being a mother I fulfill my duties with determination.
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,I need some information about the trip how many students going as well
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much money
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for
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and which food
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for
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trip
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specific dish or anything can bring with them.
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,the class teacher will go with them or not.
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,my child does not take food by themselves so you have to look after about her
meal
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and
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she did not go anywhere without me
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you could give
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treatment.I know you are a good and responsible teacher. Thank you for your support. Yours sincerely, Rabia

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Task Achievement
Try to include more detailed information or questions regarding the trip to enhance your letter's completeness.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea to improve the clarity of your message.
Task Achievement
Consider using more formal language and refining your sentences for a better writing tone.
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You provided a clear introduction about yourself and established a personal connection.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your closing expresses gratitude, which adds a polite touch to your letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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