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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table describes where the police payment came from and the pie charts give some information on how the
money
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 was spent in a particular area of Britain between 2017 and 2018.
Overall
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, it is
claer
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clear
seen
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that most of
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money
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the money
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come
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comes
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 from
National
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the National
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 Government and
spent
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is spent
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 on
salaries
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the salaries
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 of
police
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the police
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.
According to
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table
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the table
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,Out of
total
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the total
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 budget, National
Govermment
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government
 funding was on the top for both years, just around 175.5
Millions
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Million
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 and 177.8 Million
respectivly
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respectively
.The police budget was collected from the national government, the local taxes, and
the
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apply
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other sources,
for instance
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, the grants. The total costs in 2017 were 304.7M and 318.6M in 2018.The Local taxes gave 91.2M in 2017 and increased to 102.3M in 2018.
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 the other sources,
for instance
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, the grants contributed 38M and 38.5M from 2017 to 2018.
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, It is clearly seen that around 75%
money
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 was spent on
cops
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cop
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 salaries in 2017 which
was
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apply
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decreased and reached
at
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apply
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69% in 2018.
In addition
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,
Money
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 spent on
Buldinga
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building
 and transport
was remain
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remained
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samed
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same
 for both years. About 8% of the
money
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 was distributed for the technology in 2017 and increased in 2018 (14%).

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "for instance".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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