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Band 4.5

Your friend has asked you to help find a music teacher for their child. Write to your friend describing the teacher you have found. Explain why they are suitable Explain their background Explaing how they can get in touch

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Hello dear friend, I want to inform you that I have a solution to your problem. You are worried about the
music
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 teacher for your children and you asked me about that,
i
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I
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 know one person who is best for
this
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 position. He is suitable for that because his institute is near to your house so it is easy to commute
moreover
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, he has a great background he has experience of more than 30 years
in
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of
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 teaching and he is
also
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 a judge on
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music
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a music
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 show
as well as
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 he
teach
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teaches
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music
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 in
sshools
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schools
 at
senoir
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senior
 posts and he is
winner
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the winner
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 of
lot
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a lot
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 of
music
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 contestants. The
more
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most
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 important thing is that I know him personally and
i
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I
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 already tell him about your children and because of my
requst
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request
 he is coming today
at
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to
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 hotel mehal
arounf
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around
 5;00 pm which is quiet and
best
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the best
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 place to discuss anything so if you
vome
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come
 today you can meet with him and tell them if you have any questions. I can
also
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 provide you
his
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with his
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 number if you want to call 9090876767. Looking forward to
meet
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meeting
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 you Manpreet

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coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing your letter into clear paragraphs. For example, dedicate one paragraph to the teacher's suitability, another to their background, and a third for contact information.
task achievement
Try to use a more formal tone in your letter. Phrases like 'best for this position' could be rephrased for a more professional impression.
coherence and cohesion
Be careful with spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'sshools' instead of 'schools' and 'arounf' instead of 'around'. This can affect the overall quality of your writing.
task achievement
You provided specific details about the teacher, including their experience and accomplishments, which strengthens your recommendation.
coherence and cohesion
Your friendly tone makes the letter warm and inviting, which is great for a personal communication with a friend.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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