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The maps below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps illustrate the development of
the
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Porth
harbour
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since
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from
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 the year 2000
in
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to
present
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the present
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days
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day
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.
In
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overall
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, the area of the harbour has remained the same with some
modification
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modifications
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such
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 as, the number of Docks has been doubled.
In addition
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 to that, new properties
has
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 been introduced including Showers and toilets
as well as
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 a scheme for brand new Cafes and shops.
According to
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 the drafts, Fishing boats and private
yachts
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yacht
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 sections have interchanged the locations. Another
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 feature is the hotel complex has been replaced the old castle
while
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 maintaining the same area and a subway to enter
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the hotel from the main road has built to make
the
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access easy for the hotel.
However
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, the beach access has now
restricted
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been restricted
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 to only private customers.
In contrast
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 to these additions,
Public
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the Public
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beach
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Beach
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 has
untouched
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 during the development
along with
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 the Lifeboat service
center
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centre
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 and Passenger
ferries
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.
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 to that, not only the car parks
has
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 remained the same but
also
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 the Showers and toilet sector which was next to the small car park
has
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 not changed
the
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location
while
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 keeping the same routine
in
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 the main road, one additional feature is that
,
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 road access to the largest car park has changed
while
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 the development.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour
  • layout
  • marina
  • expansion
  • facilities
  • commercial buildings
  • recreational areas
  • transformation
  • shopping complex
  • dining options
  • residential buildings
  • urban development
  • environmental considerations
  • green spaces
  • walking paths
  • leisure experience
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