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The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry, digger (т40 grid wire cutter day coder cooling chamber drying oven 18 * 72 Are Might 870°C • 1309°C 200°0 • 960°C packaging

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry, digger (т40 grid wire cutter day coder cooling chamber drying oven 18 * 72 Are Might 870°C • 1309°C 200°0 • 960°C packaging
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The diagram shows how bricks are produced for the construction company.
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, the formation of bricks involves nine different steps. It starts with the extraction of clay soil and ends with the delivery of the end product by truck to the industries.
To begin
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, a digger is used to extract clay which is passed through a metal grid onto a roller.
Then
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 sand and water are added to form a mixture.
This
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 is either passed to a wire cutter or to a mould, both resulting in well-shaped bricks.
Furthermore
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, these blocks are sent into a drying oven for 1 to 2 days. After which they are passed into heating equipment known as
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a kiln
akin
kiln

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,
initially
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 at a moderate heating temperature of 200oC to 980oC,
then
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 to a high temperature of around 870oC to 1300oC. Afterwards, they are moved to a cooling chamber for about 48-72 hours. They are now ready for packaging
,
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It appears that you have an unnecessary comma in a compound predicate. Consider removing it.

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 and arranged into a lorry to be delivered to the building industry.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oc with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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