The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram displays the production process of making
sugar
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from
sugar
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cane.
Overall
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, it can be seen that there are 7 stages from growing
sugar
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canes
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to separating
sugar
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crystals from syrup to achieve
the
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pure
sugar
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.
Firstly
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,
sugar
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canes
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cane
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will be planted to grow between 12 to 18 months. After becoming mature
sugar
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canes
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, they should be harvested by specific equipment.
At
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third
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stage, harvested
sugar
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canes
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cane
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will be crushed to get juice from it. Fourthly, the juice will be purified by limestone filters. Afterwards, purified juice should be heated up by an evaporator to get syrup from it.
Then
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, the
sugar
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crystals will be separated from the syrup by a centrifuge to purify the
sugar
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.
Finally
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, the
sugar
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crystals will be dried and cooled by the heat of the sun.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, canes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Harvesting
  • Transporting
  • Processing plant
  • Washing
  • Crushing
  • Boiling
  • Concentration
  • Purification
  • Crystallization
  • Cooling process
  • Packaging
  • Distribution
  • Sustainability
  • Efficiency
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