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Writing Samples
Band 5

Write a letter expressing your interest in a job in a different country. Write to a job recruiter. Your letter should include: •Why you want to work abroad •What type of job you want to have •Questions about working abroad

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
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 letter to express my interest
to
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in working
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work
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 in Canada. I want to
work
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 in abroad to
braoden
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broaden
 my horizon of
knowlegde
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knowledge
 and for future settlement
also
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. As I think that Canada is
good
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a good
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counrty
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country
by
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for
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work
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 culture and weather.
Moreover
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, my husband has been living in Canada
since
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for
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last
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the last
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 three years and I want to help him
financilay
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financially
also
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 by working there. I have
Medical
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a Medical
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 degree from the Rayat Bhara Medical University and I
also
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 have 5
year
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years
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 of
work
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 experience in
same
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the same
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 field. I want to
work
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 there as a
Mediacl
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medical
 assistant, as
this
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 job is
relavant
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relevant
 to my previous
work
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 experience. Here, I have lots of
question
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 in mind, that what documents are needed to start
work
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 there, I have three years of
work
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 permit,
Before
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and Before
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joing
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joining
 the Job, I can submit the travel ticket, which ensure
to
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apply
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my date of joining. Look forward to
hear
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hearing
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 from you soon. Yours sincerely, John.

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coherence and cohesion
Try to clearly separate your ideas into distinct paragraphs, ensuring each paragraph has a single focus. This will help improve the overall structure of your letter.
task achievement
Make sure to proofread for spelling and grammatical errors to enhance clarity and professionalism in your writing.
task achievement
You have a clear purpose for writing your letter and provide relevant background information about your qualifications, which shows good task achievement.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a polite tone, which is appropriate for a job application, showcasing your ability to communicate effectively in a professional setting.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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