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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environmont? What can be done by governments and Indlviduals to solve this problem?

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Our world
have
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 to faced with
increasingly
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increasing
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 level of pollution.
Due to
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, plastic takeout, deodorant, water bottle, etc. These might
be
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cause climate change
even
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and even
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 damage
for
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to
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environment
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the environment
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.
Firstly
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, we should know something about climate change. It has started with increasing
level
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levels
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 of pollution.
This
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 causes some problems
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for
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, for
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 example, water waste,
difference
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the difference
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 between seasons, dirty air,
barren
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and barren
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 soil.
That is
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also
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 damaging
for
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 human health and psychology.
However
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, it can not
continues
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 like
this
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. We have to do something urgently for the future.
Secondly
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, there are a lot of solutions
for
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this
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 problem. First of all, everyone takes
responsibilities
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responsibility
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. They do not think that it is not necessary, even one thing can change everything. After that, societies must decide
do
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not
use
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to use
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 any non-recyclable product, If they have to use it, after using
they
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it they
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 have to put it recycle bin. Governments should put special bins for every neighbourhood so families can easily separate their waste. Even, states
have
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are
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 more responsible
about
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 finding solutions. In some countries,
for example
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, Germany, England and Italy found a solution
that
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is
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was
set
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to set
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 rules. After
laws
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the laws
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, anybody can not be harmful
for
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to
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forest
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forests
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 or living areas.
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This
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These
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 laws have to include,
teach
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teaching
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 our children about
that
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apply
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, using paper
instead
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 of plastic,
seperate
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separating
 waste and
also
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 support to folk about
to be
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being
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 respectful to the outside. In conclusion, with
the
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apply
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all of
behaviours
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these behaviours
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, we can protect our world,
prevent
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and prevent
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 pollution.

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language
Be careful with your grammar and word choice. For instance, 'Our world have to faced' should be 'Our world has to face'.
coherence
Ensure that ideas are well structured and logically organized. Break down long sentences and clarify your arguments.
task achievement
Provide clearer examples and link them more directly to the main points you make.
task achievement
You successfully identified the issues related to plastic pollution and provided a call to action, which is important in task response.
task achievement
Your essay addresses both individual and governmental roles in addressing plastic pollution, showing an understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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