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You have an appontment with the manager of a bank and now you relised that you cannot make it Give details about your appontment and dates explain the reason why you cannot make it ask for other dates

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Dear Sir, I hope you are well. I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that,Unfortunately,I will not be able to attend our scheduled
appointment
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 on 3
march
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March
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 2025 related to my personal house loan .I am Aman, and I am
loyal
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a loyal
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 customer of your bank. I want to reschedule my
appointment
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 for another day As you know, I have been working as a
Cheif
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Chief
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 Executives in
multinational
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a multinational
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 corporation ,and our company organise a business meeting on 8
march
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March
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 related to our upcoming project in Dubai .The important details of the project will be presented by me. I am quite busy,
therefore
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, I cannot manage to attend any
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appointment
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appointments
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 before
this
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 meeting. I hope you understand my situation and co-operate with me. please let me know about the alternative
appointment
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 dates so that I could able to attend
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appointment
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the appointment
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 with you. Your
sincerily
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sincerely
sincerity
 Aman

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grammar
Ensure proper spacing after commas for better readability. For example, 'Unfortunately, I will not...' instead of 'Unfortunately,I will not...'.
vocabulary
Clarify your job title: 'Chief Executive Officer' instead of 'Cheif Executives'. Also, consider using 'a meeting' instead of 'business meeting' for precision.
coherence
Use transitions to connect paragraphs better, such as 'Furthermore' or 'Additionally' to introduce the reason for rescheduling.
coherence
Include a closing statement like 'I look forward to hearing from you soon' to add a polite conclusion to your letter.
positive
The letter maintains a polite and formal tone throughout, which is very appropriate for a communication with a bank manager.
positive
The reason for rescheduling the appointment is clearly explained, which adds credibility to your request.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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