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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

Museums are important as they promote the culture and heritage of country. With technology, all the information regarding this can be freely found. Will museums be no longer required? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Museums
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vital
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 role in enchancing the customs and inheritance of
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country
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a country
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 but with modern
technology
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 or Automated
technology
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, everyone
have
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 free access to
such
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 information which
reduce
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 the
imprtance
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importance
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museums
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. In my opinion,
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museums
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 will be
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a neccesity
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neccesity
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necessity
 for every region as
technology
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 cannot replace the in-person experience.
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 the museum serves as
tourist
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a tourist
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 attraction for the
country
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. It
contribute
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in
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 the economy of
place
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the place
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 because many tourists would love to visit over there.
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the
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old people
does
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 not trust
technology
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, so, they prefer to visit the place in person and
by
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putting fees in there can be
very
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 good source of income for
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country
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the country
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.
secondly
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, it helps to preserve the old and invaluable heritage of the
country
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to keep
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the discoveries about old culture
needs
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 a place to be kept and
museums
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 serve
its
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 purpose well enough.
in addition
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 to it, it
csn
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can
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as
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for
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 educational
purpose
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purposes
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 as well.
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younger
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the younger
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 generation will be able to learn about their ancestors and their way of living. children can read and feel what their older generation had
indured
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endured
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 and how they
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 in the old times from hardships.
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,
the
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museums
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 are very important for any
country
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 and
are serving
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 their purpose.
technology
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 should be used over
their
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there
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 to make them more worthwhile and to help in
maintaing
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maintaining
 the
infrastrcutre
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infrastructure
 of
museums
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.

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Grammar
Make sure to check your spelling and grammar to improve clarity. For instance, 'enchanting' should be 'enhancing', 'imprtance' should be 'importance', 'neccesity' should be 'necessity', and 'csn' should be 'can'.
Formal Language
Try to use a more formal tone and avoid informal phrases like 'over there'. Instead, say something like 'in museums'.
Supporting Details
Enhance your support for the main points with clearer and more specific examples, which will strengthen your argument and make the essay more compelling.
Argument Clarity
You have presented a clear argument that museums are necessary despite technological advances, which is a good stance to take.
Example Usage
You provided examples, such as the economic impact of tourism and educational value, which illustrate your points well.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tactile experience
  • sensory experience
  • immersion
  • virtual reality (VR)
  • augmented reality (AR)
  • hybrid experiences
  • irreplaceable value
  • authentic artifacts
  • guardians of cultural
  • historical treasures
  • community building
  • public discourse
  • invaluable learning opportunities
  • authentic experiences
  • evolving
  • integrate
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