he maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960

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The chart demonstrates the proportion change in the share of international

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among university graduates in different Canadian cities between 2001 and 2006. We can see, that in 2006s

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of international

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in every province

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more than in 2001s Between New

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and Ontario was

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in the share of international

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. Ontario in

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2001

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than New

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between New

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and British Columbia, the chart shows, that British Columbia had number of

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as many New

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as in 2006. British Columbia

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grow of population

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than every province in Canada,

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less popular among international

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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5 paragraphs

117 words

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he maps below show the changes that have taken place at Queen Mary Hospital since its construction in 1960

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