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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

You are planning a business trip to another city. You will have some free time to do some sightseeing while you are there. Write a letter to a friend who lives in the city you will visit. In your letter •explain the purpose of the trip •ask about things to do and see in the city •invite your friend to do something with you during your visit Begin your letter as follows: Dear………..

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Dear Ureen, I hope
this
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 you will be fine and want to tell you about my business trip that I am visiting your city London where my company held a meeting. I am working in multinational companies who
made
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make
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 software for different industries as well any small shop or any restaurant so I have to visit these
place
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places
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 to understand their work
then
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according
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according to
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 their work we
made
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make
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a
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apply
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software for them.I am engaged
with
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for
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whole
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the whole
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 week but
Friday
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from Friday
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 evening till Sunday I am free. There are extremely places that we explore in your city,I decided to go with you
moreover
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,I
want
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want to
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 taste
those couisine
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that couisine
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 that
did
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I have
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 not
eat
Wrong verb form
eaten
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 before.I can spend time with each other. A big tennis playground over there
when
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where
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 we can play,you
remembered
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remember
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 since our childhood we
were playing
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played
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 in
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 place and spent
lot
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a lot
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 of to
play
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playing
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this
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 game. I want to collect a memory
with
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apply
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that will be close to my heart. That's for me now,take care
hope
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and hope
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 you will enjoy with me. Best regards, Rabia.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph contains a single main idea to enhance clarity.
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Include more details about what you would like to do together, making the invitation more engaging.
coherence and cohesion
Check for grammatical accuracy and organize sentences more clearly to improve readability.
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The letter includes a clear purpose for the visit, which is great.
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Your friendly tone makes the letter inviting and personal, which is excellent for engagement.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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