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Some scientists believe that in the future computers will be more intelligence than human beings. While some see this as a positive development others worry about the negative consequences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some scientists predict that artificial intelligence will surpass human capabilities in the near
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. Some view it as a positive development, as it enhances
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convenience and improves quality of life. Others,
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, believe that it will disrupt the economy and pose security threats. In
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repetitive and monotonous tasks, allowing
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 to focus on more productive roles,
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 as supervising robots and managing problem-solving tasks.
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,
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 can allocate their time to activities that enhance their quality of life.
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, AI significantly
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 production, particularly in factories, as robots do not require breaks and can operate far longer than
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, intelligent computers could have a significant impact on the economy, potentially threatening numerous jobs by displacing human workers.
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 especially true for low-income workers, whose roles are easily replaceable.
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, there is a risk that robots could unintentionally gain control over
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, it could threaten human security, potentially leading to wars and destruction of humanity.
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, I personally believe that artificial
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 is necessary to make the world more tolerable by handling tedious and strenuous tasks.
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, careful regulation is essential to prevent job displacement and potential security threats.

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Consider adding more specific examples or statistics to strengthen your points about AI's benefits and potential threats.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each point is fully developed and connects back to the main argument, particularly in terms of how these points support your overall opinion.
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Review your grammar for minor errors, such as 'artificial intelligent' which should be 'artificial intelligence'.
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You presented both views clearly and structured your essay effectively, leading to a strong introduction and conclusion.
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Your understanding of how AI can enhance productivity and its potential risks is well-articulated, showing a good grasp of the topic.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificial Intelligence (AI)
  • Automation
  • Job displacement
  • Data analysis
  • Economic growth
  • Superintelligence
  • Creative endeavours
  • Ethical concerns
  • Existential risk
  • Technology dependency
  • Privacy issues
  • Innovative solutions
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