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Some people think that paying taxes is their only duty, while others believe that we have more responsibilities towards our society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In
this
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 contemporary epoch, it is necessary for a citizen to be liable and prudent towards their society which can
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 the economic infrastructure. The notion that
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 paying taxes should be the only accountability a citizen
hold
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 is a viewpoint held by many
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 critics
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 that,there are many more duties of an individual towards their nation. I opine that
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 various other factors which
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affect
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economy
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the economy
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 should be in account for the people residing in a
country
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. To commence with, there are
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 of reasons for believing that tax expense should be the only task they must perform.
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Firstly
, the relentless competition
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 is leading towards
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the incline
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 of inflation which eventually, offend people for taking more
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responsibilities
.
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, the affordibility rate for tremendous things in certain countries
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 sometimes very low and
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, holding accountability for extra expenses seems a challenging task for them
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, the burden of meeting enormous expenses
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, obstruct residents
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 taking more than one liability.
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, critics who
belived
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believed
believe
 that society members should be doing more for their
country
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 means that
taks
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tasks
such
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 as
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 donations, contributing
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developement
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development
 and emphasizing on
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maintenance
 and wellness of
nation
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.
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, if
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
governments
have
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 to focus on everything for their
country
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then
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 it will become a daunting task to
excelerate
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accelerate
the
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economic growth because ultimately,
individual level
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individual-level
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 contribution is important for the
overall
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developement
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development
. In my opinion, it is the duty of both
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 and citizens
of holding
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to hold
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 all the necessary factors which
helps
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 ameliorate the
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propoganda
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propaganda
 of
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country
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the country
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.
To conclude
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,
although
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the
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inflation becomes
hindrance
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a hindrance
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 towards individual contribution, it is crystal clear from
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the above
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 testimonials that a resident should be
perfoeming alot
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performing a lot
 more than just paying
tax
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taxes
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 to help
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
to
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reach at full potential.

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Task Achievement
Consider improving the clarity of your argument by using more precise language. For example, instead of saying 'various other factors which effect economy', specify what those factors are.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to ensure your ideas are linked more smoothly. Using cohesive devices and transitions will help to guide the reader through your argument.
General Writing
Be careful with spelling and grammatical accuracy, as errors can detract from the overall clarity of your essay. Pay attention to words like 'belives', 'affordibility', and 'goverment'.
Task Achievement
You have addressed the prompt by discussing both views and providing your opinion, which is an essential part of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction presents the issue well and states your opinion, setting the stage for the discussion that follows.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental duty
  • public services
  • infrastructure
  • social welfare
  • economic stability
  • legal consequences
  • volunteering
  • community service
  • societal well-being
  • donation
  • charities
  • social issues
  • active participation
  • democracy
  • civil society
  • healthy society
  • balancing
  • well-functioning society
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