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Band 5.5

If a product is good or it meets people's needs, people will buy it so advertising is unnecessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Marketing techniques play a crucial role in the sale of items. It is argued that if things are of excellence and fulfil the
customers
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' desires
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 should not be publicized. I strongly agree with
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 statement
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cost effectiveness
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 and
quality
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. First and foremost, the bombardment of commercials on social media involves a huge expenditure. It has been observed that
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 brands incur a substantial amount in the publicity of their products.
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, the
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 is borne by the end user, the client.
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 strategy leads to an increase in the price of the items advertised. No businessman pays from his pocket, so the
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 of all
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 promotions falls upon the poor buyer. If the organization does not publicize its products, the benefit of the money saved could be
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transferred
 to the purchaser.
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 will not only motivate him to buy
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 product but
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 feel content and uncheated.
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,
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word-of-mouth goes a long way than the money spent to grab the attention of the customer and entice him to buy it, claiming its advantages. An unadvertised item , speaks for itself and is considered to be of better
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 and standards. A recent study by IIMS Kolkata revealed that 70% of
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 are inclined to buy things that they have heard of from a relative or friend or have actually tried themselves as a first buyer.
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 is because commercials
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 not add to the qualitative value.
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 concept is gaining popularity and
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 incurring expenses on promoting an item becomes futile.
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 money could have been better used to improve the
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. In conclusion, pretentious adverts are just the means to attract
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. Enhanced
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 and reduced
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 proves to be better methods of selling. In my view,
customers
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 should not bear the brunt of advertisement costs and in return receive poor-
quality
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 products.

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Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea that is explicitly stated.
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Provide a more balanced view by addressing counterarguments, which can enhance the depth of your analysis.
coherence and cohesion
Incorporate clear topic sentences for each paragraph to guide the reader more effectively.
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Your argument regarding the cost-effectiveness of not advertising is well-articulated and provides a solid foundation for your opinion.
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The use of relevant examples, such as the study from IIMS Kolkata, strengthens your argument.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advertising
  • consumer behavior
  • product quality
  • brand loyalty
  • market saturation
  • word-of-mouth
  • intrinsic
  • awareness
  • strategic marketing
  • emotional appeal
  • psychological influence
  • purchasing decisions
  • saturated market
  • successful products
  • contrasting examples
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