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The graph below shows the percentage of all adults in canada who were medically overweight or obese in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of all adults in canada who were medically overweight or obese in 2018. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the
percentage
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 of medically overweight or obese adults in Canada in 2018, categorized by
age
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 and gender.
Overall
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, the proportion of
obesity
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 increased with
age
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, with
men
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 having consistently higher
obesity
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 rates than
women
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 across all
age
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groups
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.
To begin
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 with, the
percentage
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 of obese
men
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 followed an upward trend across the
age
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groups
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,
although
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 there was a slight decline among those aged 65 and above. Among the youngest
group
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 (18-19 years old), the
obesity
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rate
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 stood at just over 30%, the lowest among
men
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.
This
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 figure continued to rise, peaking at approximately 77% in the 50-64
age
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group
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, which recorded the highest
obesity
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rate
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.
However
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,
this
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percentage
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 declined slightly to just over 70% among the oldest
age
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group
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 (65+).
Similarly
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, the proportion of obese
women
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 showed a steady increase across the
age
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groups
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. The
percentage
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 started at around 30% for 18-19-year-old females and gradually rose throughout the
age
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 categories. The highest
obesity
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rate
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 among
women
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 was observed in the 65+
age
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group
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, at approximately 65%. Throughout all
age
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groups
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,
men
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 exhibited a higher
obesity
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rate
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 than
women
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, except among the youngest
group
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, where both genders had similar
obesity
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 levels of around 30%.
Overall
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, the total
percentage
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 of obese
men
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 was about 14% higher than that of
women
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, age, obesity, men, women, groups, group, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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