Some people argue higher taxes should be collected from industries causing higher than industrial pollution, whereas other argue there are better ways to deal it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In recent years, there has been a tremendous increase in the number of individuals
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of Industrial
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. On one hand , there are those
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that there are better
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to deal with increasing industrial
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, critics including myself , strongly oppose the
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that higher
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should be collected from industries causing higher industrial
pollution
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, there is an argument to be made that higher
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should be imposed on big
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corporations
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that cause increasing
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, in 2020 a study showed that 25% of the world's
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was caused by large production
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reason, it is evident that higher
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must be imposed on these
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so that
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tax money can be invested into river clean-up and reforestation.What is more, with
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increased
tax money, more air-purifying plants can be built to remove the harmful toxins
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released
into the air by these
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companies
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being the case, it can assumed that if
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collected are increased , the money can be used to save the damaged
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environment
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, it must be stated that there are
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other ways
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of dealing with it.
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,
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companies
can be tasked with donating to charity , which allows
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be directly accountable for
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their
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,
it is clear that
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there are many other
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to deal with
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who pollute the earth
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then
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than
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just imposing harsher
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, by making them
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charity events and other public services they will come to realize the consequences of their actions.With
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in mind,there is no doubt that
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are
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much
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to deal with industrial
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,
while
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some may feel that
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are better
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to deal with corporational
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others, myself included, hold the
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view
that collecting higher
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is a
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method to make the heads of their factories realized
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their
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Work on your grammar and punctuation, especially with the use of commas and sentence structure. This will help improve the clarity of your ideas.
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Provide a clearer introduction that outlines both views more distinctly and strengthens your argument in the thesis statement.
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Ensure your examples directly relate to the points you are making in order to provide stronger support for your arguments.
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You present a clear opinion on the topic and indicate your stance, which is essential for task achievement.
coherence and cohesion
You attempt to address both views in your essay, which is important for coherence and cohesion.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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