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The tаblе and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in оnе аrеа of Britain. The tаblе shows where the mоnеу саtе from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tаblе and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in оnе аrеа of Britain. The tаblе shows where the mоnеу саtе from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table and pie chart
shows
Correct subject-verb agreement
show
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 the police budget included 3 types of money cate from and the three items percentage of outcome in 2017 to 2018 in one area of Britain. In the table, it's clearly shown that
police
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the police
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 budget
are
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apply
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increased from 2017 to 2018,
total
Wrong verb form
totalling
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 about 13.9
million
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pound
Change to a plural noun
pounds
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. The local taxes in
police
Correct article usage
the police
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 budget
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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changed
biggest
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the biggest
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, it
grow
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grows
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 11.1
million
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 up to 102.3
million
Use synonyms
 pounds in 2018.And the other sources
was
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were
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 changed smallest, only increased
0.5
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by 0.5
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million
Use synonyms
.
According to
Linking Words
 the pie chart,
the
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apply
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salaries
is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 the biggest part of the money
was
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that was
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 spent. In 2017, the percentage
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 75% and in 2018, the number
was flop
Wrong verb form
flopped
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 to 69%. And the outcome in buildings and transport didn't change between 2017 and 2018, it's about 17%. From the salaries spent decreased, the money
used
Verb problem
spent
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in
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on
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 technology
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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increased, in 2017 the percentage
is
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was
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 8% and it
grow
Wrong verb form
grew
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up
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from
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 6% to 14% in 2018.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget
  • funding sources
  • income
  • distribution
  • allocation
  • government grants
  • local taxes
  • expenses
  • operational costs
  • administration
  • community programs
  • salaries
  • law enforcement
  • financial trends
  • comparative analysis
  • implications
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