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The pie chart provides a breakdown by type of transport and car in Edmonton with the table chart indicating whether the reason for using the car in city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart provides a breakdown by type of transport and car in Edmonton with the table chart indicating whether the reason for using the car in city. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart illustrates the distribution of a variety of transport in Edmonton and the table displays people's motivation to drive a
car
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 in the city.
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, Edmonton's population prefer to drive their own vehicle
instead
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 of using public or private transportation and that's principally for working or business reasons. Looking at the pie chart,
car
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 results as the most preferred choice to move in the city, counting 45% person who decided to
use
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 it.
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, LRT is the second option, with 35% of people taking the rail to move.
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, buses and taxis are the least popular, in fact both of them asses the rate of utilisation at 10%. In terms of the different purposes for which people
use
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 their
car
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 to get around the city, 55%
use
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 it to get to and from work, which emerges as the most important reason.
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, only 15% intend to
use
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 their
car
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 for shopping, the same percentage as for leisure activities.
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, 40% of the community drives to take children to school, which is similar to the business reason that differs from it by about 5 percentage points.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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