Some people believe school children should help to create rules their schools. Other say teacher alone should decide what the rules are. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In recent years, issues about
schools
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school
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rules
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has
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sparked a debate.
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, many people think that students should contribute
in
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to
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school
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rules
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formation,
while
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others advocate that
such
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laws should only be made by
teachers
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.
However
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, despite both perspectives having valid
arguement
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arguments
,
due to
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the fact that
teachers
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might focus on discipline,
whereas
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school
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children
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can suggest modern ideas, I believe that
children
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should be involved,
due to
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their ability to display motive.
This
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essay will explore these views in
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.
To begin
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with, there is no doubt that
teachers
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are
knowledgeable
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more knowledgeable
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than students, especially in terms of
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disciplines
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discipline
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and morals.
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, being in charge of
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schools'
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laws and policy is paramount, because that will
enourage
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encourage
strict discipline and
obedence
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obedience
by the pupils towards
this
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rule.
For instance
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, imposing punishments on
late comers
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latecomers
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,
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this
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will only be seen as
serious
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rule if set by the
teachers
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rather than a joint decision between
teachers
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and
student
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students
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.
Besides
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, most
children
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are not fully developed to make certain decisions, which makes
teachers
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ideal for rule
imposement
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improvement
implement
.
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, in
this
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modern era,
children
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can contribute greatly
in
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creating
school
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rules
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, through
suggestion
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the suggestion
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of modern ideas.
This
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will not only motivate them to follow the
rules
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,
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but will
also
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enhence
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enhance
thier
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their
interest in preserving it.
For example
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, when students suggest
restriction
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restrictions
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on phone usage during class hours, they would willingly abide
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this
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because it was set by them
instead
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of feeling forced to obey.
As a result
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,
this
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will increase their
motive
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motivation
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to learn, making the
school
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an interesting environment with free
rules
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. In conclusion,
while
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some believe
rules
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created by
teachers
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alone can develop a strict and
discipline
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disciplined
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environments
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environment
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, others think involving
school
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children
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can bring inclusion of modern
trend
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trends
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into the
school
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regulations.
However
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, I firmly think that pupils should be among the
decision makers
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,
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because
this
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will
enourage
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encourage
their ability to comply easily with
rules
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been
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being
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set.

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task achievement
Clarify your position in the introduction and ensure it's more concise.
coherence cohesion
Improve the flow of ideas by using clearer linking words and phrases.
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Ensure spelling is correct (e.g., 'argument' instead of 'arguement', 'enhance' instead of 'enhence').
coherence cohesion
You presented both sides of the argument effectively.
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Your examples were relevant and helped to illustrate your points well.
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