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Band 2.5

Many of today’s most urgent problems can only be solved through international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 contemporary Era, various hindrances
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 by overseas cooperation.I
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 notion.
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 disquisition highlights the important role played by international cooperation related to problems which are caused at
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the economic
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 level. To commence with, international cooperation
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 level .These
organization
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 provide a solution to
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all economic problems
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 as serious issues like recession time ,inflation rate etc.To be more precise , if the inflation rate
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 rate it
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a obstacles
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 for
nation
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the nation
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 for
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 growth .So these
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corporations
operations
helps
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 a
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 condition.
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, these cooperations
aids
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 a
country
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 to protect from terrorism.
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, international organizations
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as
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 security . Who helps a
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 from any
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 attacks
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which
 increases the safety of the nation and
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prevent
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 the
country
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 from any damages which are caused by terrorism.
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,organizational
cooperations
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cooperation
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 plays a crucial role in an economy by providing
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security against threats and other economic problems of recession and inflation.

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Grammar
Ensure that sentences are grammatically correct and well-structured. Some phrases, like 'various hindrances are combat' and 'international cooperation are operate', contain grammatical errors that can confuse readers.
Task Achievement
Provide clearer examples that support your points. While you mention inflation and recession, you could elaborate further on how international cooperation specifically addresses these issues with real-world examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion need more clarity and coherence. The introduction should clearly state the significance of international cooperation, and the conclusion should summarize the key points effectively.
Task Achievement
The essay presents a clear stance on the topic, indicating strong agreement with the need for international cooperation.
Task Achievement
The identification of international organizations as a solution to economic problems shows an understanding of the topic.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • international cooperation
  • global challenges
  • collaborative efforts
  • policies and initiatives
  • transcend borders
  • mitigate
  • health crises
  • information sharing
  • economic stability
  • monetary policies
  • trade agreements
  • financial downturns
  • intelligence sharing
  • humanitarian aid
  • natural disasters
  • global safety
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